WT-1 Academic Check

(Question is in the file below) (you will see corrections in uppercase letters)

The diagram provides the information about the quick formation of noodles.

THESIS STATEMENT IS MISSING.

Overall, the manufacturing of noodles consists of 8 steps that begin from the storage of flour in silos and ends in labeling and sealing missing of any step can halt the whole diagram.

‘OVERALL’ SHOULD BE USED IN CONCLUSION

SENTENCE IS NOT GRAMMATICALLY CORRECT

After analyzing it can be seen clearly In the first step, the flour is stored in large silos, afterwards it is put into rollers along with water and oil furthermore rollers spin to mix up ingredients to knead a dough that makes a dough sheets, right after that dough sheets are processed through a machine to convert them into dough strips.

SENTENCE IS TOO LONG

The given diagram further collates that in the fifth step dough strips are passed through the same machine to make discs of noodles, aftermath discs are put into hot oil for cooking and drying later discs are put into small cups where vegetables and spices are poured on it then noodles gets prepared. In the last steps cups that contain noodles are sealed thoroughly labeled and sold out in the market.

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Work on sentence formation

Use more cohesive devices, like, Next in the process, After this, etc