Opinion Essay Tutorial 2 Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

WRITE

Introduction

Paraphrase + Thesis statement

It is a common trend that people aspire to run their own business, instead of pursuing a job. In my opinion, the benefits of running a business outweigh the problems associated with it.

Body paragraph 1 (discuss the advantages, which should be more than the disadvantages)

Advantage 1+ explanation

Advantage 2+ explanation

Advantage 3 +explanation

Note: explanation can be skipped for a point and substituted with an explanatory sentence (like I have done below) if the paragraph becomes too long.

Nevertheless, I believe there are a lot of significant advantages to owning a business. Firstly, an entrepreneur has complete authority over decision-making for his business. For instance, a coaching institute owner can set up her own flexible timings for providing the training to her students. In contrast to this, the employees working in a company do not have much say in the major decisions of the company. Secondly, children who belong to a business family can easily choose it as their career path. Thirdly, business owners can increase their revenue manifold when the business grows. In other words, people can earn more than a job by running a successful business. Undoubtedly, owning a business is quite beneficial for people.

Body Paragraph 2 (discuss the disadvantages, which should be less than the advantages)

Disadvantage 1 + explanation/example

Disadvantage 2 (optional) + explanation/example

Admittedly, there are a few disadvantages to owning a business. One of the obvious disadvantages is the initial investment required for the start up. For example, the entrepreneur may need to invest in the inventory, staff or area to begin his new business. However, everyone is not affluent enough to invest a large amount of money in the beginning. Secondly, running a business always involves a certain amount of risk, that is,  there is no fixed monthly income and it could incur losses sometimes. In short, a business can be a burden if it is not managed and monitored appropriately.

Conclusion

Paraphrase of the thesis statement + Future recommendations

In conclusion, while there are minor disadvantages to running a business, I believe the benefits are greater than the issues associated with it. In fact, the potential problems can be mitigated by taking the correct measures and monitoring progress.

CHECK

Check your essay in 3-4 minutes

Well, why do I need to check my essay? Because before the examiner looks at my mistakes, it is always better that I find and correct them.

How to check then? Simple, again.

This step will be your major band decider in the writing section.  

a. Vocabulary– cross check and replace the repeated words with synonyms.  See if you can use few uncommon words for the simple ones. (But keep these only a FEW) 

b. Grammar – Cross check your sentence structures (Make sure you have constructed various types), Tenses, prepositions, articles, commas. Why I am mentioning these? Because in almost all the essays I check contain mistakes in these grammatical topics. So, it is good idea to improve basic grammar and then start preparing for IELTS. 

c. Arguments– Are they balanced? Have you answered the question fully?

d. Linkers– Are there enough?

These four points are actually the four criteria of checking IELTS Essay, but in our own language.