Essay check Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

While few people argue that astronautics leads to depletion of available resources, others believe that it is important to research for benefit of the humankind. In my opinion, it is better to investigate the space as it might be beneficial for the human race by bring/BRINGING a new world for them.

ASTRONAUTICS IS NOT SPACE EXPLORATION..IT IS THE SCIENCE OF SPACE TRAVEL ONLY….
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On one side of the argument, people have no interest in space study because of monetary loss due to the destruction of space vehicles in the galaxy. At times, the blast of rockets has been captured while they were leaving or entering the earth’s atmosphere. For instance, in 1997, a rocket, with 5 astronauts, destroyed while entering into the earth’s environment because it was made up of weak material. Then, after 2 years of this incident, a private company sent another rocket which also crashed due to same reason but while leaving the earth’s gravity. Such reasons convinces people that investing funds in space activities is a wastage.

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Despite the above arguments, I consider that the study of space is necessary because innovation/experiments yields/YIELD better results and it might provide bigger benefits than losses. Whether lots of rockets crashed in the space but,/ THIS PHRASE NOT REQUIRED HERE SINCE ITS MENTIONED IN BODY PARA 1 ALREADY today, science has reached its apex thereby/THUS it is possible to send unmanned rockets into space which have not only small losses but also threw/THROW satellites into the space. Due to this invention of GPS occurred which has become the most helpful product. In addition, such activities might prepare mankind with a backup plan so that they can shift to other planet in case any calamity is about to come on earth.

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In conclusion, while both the views have their own standpoint but sometimes it is necessary to forget about small losses if rewards are bigger because it is well said that high risk brings high gains.
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